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Poem Title	Poet Name	Critique Given by Duane J Jackson	Critique Date
Patterns	Regis L Chapman	Hi Regis, There is a strong lyrical quality in the poem and the strcture here is very free inspite of the rhyme - symbolic of your characterisitic free and spontaneous flow of thought. I like the middle and to some extent the end because that is where the punch comes in. I felt the beginning was a little too cluttered. Thanks for sharing this philosophy of 'real' life. Duane.	2009-06-06 09:48:13
Ne'er Paragon	DeniMari Z.	Hi Deni, Indeed we are far from perfect and uniquely bring our identities and charachter to this life. We were never meant to be perfect in any way but to test oursleves to eventually achieve that state. And yes, centuries have proven that we are in essence very tolderable. Another nice read full of philosophical musing. I beleive JCH has already pointed out the spelling nits, hence the revision. This was interesting and enhances the process of self-discovery. Duane.	2009-05-17 23:31:43
Heal - To Trust Is Bliss	DeniMari Z.	Hi Deni, This is one of the BEST of yours that I have read...if not THE BEST. Why this worked so well for me is that it all seemed so natural and spontaneous and seemed to break away from the shackles of the form you've been experimenting with lately. This flowed like a waterfall of encouragement. I can surely use some. The images were not common. They carried weight - life's background music and its band, the cradle of thought, flying over fires from hell, the rebelled bridges, the shield built to clibm ivy.. I loved this. It is philosophically rich and well penned. Definteily on my list and I'm sure this will rank very high :-) Duane.	2009-05-17 02:11:22
In Shedding	James C. Horak	Hello James, Very interesting. If I've understood correctly this poem has to do with the shortness of breath - more specifically, lung or heart trouble. I like how this poem flowed from the 'dry mouthed plunderer' to the image of the 'snake skin upon a bush'. Great piece. Duane.	2009-05-16 23:36:42
Weakening World	DeniMari Z.	Hi Deni, Very strong philosophical undertones run on the 'rail road' of your poem. Human nature, life, destiny...great ingredients for poetry. I find your format to be rather interesting - almost like a train all set to begin its journey with the initial chugging and the pick-up in speed. I liked this. Duane.	2009-05-07 20:25:05
My voting	Dellena Rovito	Hi Dellena, Thank you so much for your consideration of Flesh Of Life. You made a late start in April and I'm sure a lot of us wondered where you are at. Thanks for being a prominent part of TPL. It was an excellent month in terms of critiques and submissions with the exception that Mark S has not been around. He's been a key player in the survival of this site. I hope we are as robust in the month of May. Thanks again, Duane.	2009-05-02 23:04:19
My Votes for April	James C. Horak	Hi James, Thank you again for your thoughts on my poems and for ranking raft-wreck, 2. It was a fantastic month on tpl compared to the last two that flew by with the exception of Mark. His presence here is sorely missed. I hope he is fine. James Schanne has posted before and I hope that this new post is a sign that his hibernation has ended. I guess our lists are almost similar with the exception of Mr. Ranswill and Monica who never made it onto mine. Duane.	2009-05-02 19:18:00
The Blossoms Eye	James Edward Schanne	Hello James, It was a pleasure to read this piece. You lure your reader in by a very unique title ! I relished the imagery and the way this poem flows...often direct rhyme such as bark/dark; jump/stump, etc can appear to be forced or cause a piece to be sing songy but because of your inherent gift of being an accomplished poet, none of that happens here. I would think twice of using this sort of rhyme if I were to sit down to write a piece but in oyur case, it all seems to fit in so naturally. I enjoyed the sun rise in the end and it is only fitting that I get to read this first, this morning. Duane.	2009-05-02 02:51:19
Mother's Boy	DeniMari Z.	Hello Deni, This was a very personal poem and I can tell that immense love went into it. There is no greater requirment for successful poetry than FEELING itself and these sensitive and softening words from a mother to her son, exemplify this. Thank you for bearing your heart to us and for also giving us some hope as we recount similar situations in our own lives. Duane.	2009-05-02 02:26:26
Spaces	Dellena Rovito	Hi Dellena, Very strong and effective close...I felt the first two stanzas were weaker but thats probably a build up to the excellent climax. Verse 2 would have to be the weaker of the three though and you might want to re-look references to close bonds, love's breath, coexist in the now, want you ever to be part of me......perhaps to enhance more interesting ways of saying these. Neverthless, very strong last verse...it might even stand alone and brave a storm :-)) Duane.	2009-05-01 00:10:50
See Yourself Found	DeniMari Z.	Hi DeniMari, A philosophical look at our journey of life...I like rhyme...and I like lyricism in poetry though to be lyrical, one must be extremely cautious. Firstly, we need to ensure that our rhyme is not too obvious (using slant and subtle rhyme helps) and secondly, when limiting ourselves to meter and beats, one must ensure that lines are not forced and structure flows uniformly. Here, the last verse is a complete break from the others that flow before it. Here is a good example of subtle rhyme that stands out from some of its forced cousins in your poem : Life, not a game and rules can be changed It's here and gone after seasons of rain Looking forward to see a revision of this. The thought behind the poem is good... Duane.	2009-04-26 11:41:12
When Children....	James C. Horak	Hello James, Quite shocking. I'm not too familiar with Roy Orbison's songs except for 'drove all night' and a couple of others or until recently, Sugarloaf (green eyes lady). I think it is sad when a poet can use someone else's creation and parade as if it is his/her own. Why do people wish to discredit themselves in this manner? And dont they realise the consequences of it all? There should be no compromises. Duane.	2009-04-25 20:00:48
Blur of Rapture	DeniMari Z.	Hi Deni, This piece resonates with a feeling of uplifment. You have it all here - tinted tips of flowers, a new view, aromatic scents, purple spreads and yellow patterns, angels,etc. Again, maybe because I'm a fanatic for short poems, I would rather this be trimmed to pack in more punch. I would suggest re-working verse 1 as it does not shine as much as those that follow. It is very hot back here in India. We are currently under a heat wave. I hope the weather is a lot cooler where you are. Duane.	2009-04-23 23:30:28
Into Turn	James C. Horak	Hi James, I apologise for not being able to recall a news story that brought this family to the fore. The closest I am able to get to a family of monsters is the dad who kept his daughter in the basement and got her preganant but dad would make him a monster dad. Why tarnish the family for his sins. Nevertheless, it would not take a news story to appreciate the poem. This world is filled with monsters and they are ever so dangerous when they club to form families. I have come to know of one such family of late (barring the husband). Nevetheless, your piece takes on greater significance than meets the eye. Your belief in justice, morality stand out and the heart of corruption stands exposed. Thank you for posting this read. It got me thinking for quite some time. Duane.	2009-04-20 22:18:36
Calling center blues	Claus Michael Ranswill	Hi Claus, Welcome back to TPL. I hope you hang in here and take the ride to poetic growth and development. I work in a call center too and you do capture the chaos of it all. I for one, would like to see some fresh imagery here and yes, more uniform meter. Your lines at times skip beats and there are those that lack a beat or two. You should look closer at syllable count. I'm not a fan of the rhyme scheme you have used. Some of it seems too forced - do/zoo...right/fight. Closer attention to this would help raise the level of this piece a notch. Duane.	2009-04-20 13:36:28
On A Wing	Regis L Chapman	Hi Regis, You have done well to tailor this piece in keeping with the 'motion' of the free fall, swerving, birds. This piece definitely has wings !! I likw the theme and the likeness you draw between the free spirit of brids and being. I do feel that the length of the piece can be reduced to pack more power; These were your strongest lines : ------ the low sound of slowly roiling rounds unheard to ear and yet so clear in kind so little to say and yet still, so many colors gray in sight like chimes in crystal, rhymes preserved in posterity by solar angels discrete gently retiring from view --------- I felt they are a poem in themselves and a lot more powerful when kept as compact as that. Duane.	2009-04-18 23:59:39
In Dreams	Michael Bird	Hi Michael, "It's too bad..all these things only happen in my dreams" - powerful thought and this should serve as the pillar of your poem. With a pillar such as this, I would expect the construction to be stronger in temrs of imagery. A critiquer once told me when I first began - " reach out for the unique"..I hope to see a revision of this. Duane.	2009-04-18 23:38:59
Scan........(Revised)	DeniMari Z.	Hi Deni, I'm glad to see a revision. I swear by revision and I owe a lot of my progress to the likes of JCH and Mark S who have shown me what does not work apart from what does. I will stick to my earlier crit. This is a powerful piece. I also still feel that the piece should end with your thrid verse. The image of cracks in the walls moves away from the garden patch and sort of dilutes the power. Duane.	2009-04-18 00:48:43
Tale of the Bouncing Bunny	Monica ONeill	Hi Monica, A nice one on the occassion of Easter. The piece had a good brisk pace to it in keeping with the hippity hoppity bunny :-) I like the use of imagery and rhyme...you keep it simple, yet engaging. Good to see a post from you. It has been quite some time. Duane.	2009-04-12 21:06:44
Green Eyed Lady	Michael Bird	Hi Michael, Poetry is the ideal medium to express our feelings and you have done so here in appreciating your green eyed lady. I was wondering if you would now like to set your poetic journey a sense of direction. You might want to ask youself, " Do I write simply to create an outlet or vent for feelings" or " do I write because I see this as a craft that can be developed"...OR BOTH. I was also wanting to know if you do attempt to employ the feedback you are provided by those who critique your poems? Can you show us examples where you have put feedback into practise? Duane.	2009-04-11 23:06:30
March Vote!	Dellena Rovito	Hi Dellena, Thank you for voting 'sleep' as the number one poem for the month of march. I enjoyed writing it as much as I enjoy 'sleeping'. Duane.	2009-04-11 23:01:07
My Votes for March	James C. Horak	Hi James, Thank you so much for your consideration of 'sleep' as the top poem of the month. Here's looking forward to a better month in April in terms of submissions and critiques. Duane.	2009-04-11 22:59:51
Play on Water	James C. Horak	Hi James, My last poem critique for the poems submitted this month and there is no better way to end than to have the pleasure of reviewing a piece of yours. 'Play on water' is rich. Looking forward to an active month ahead. Duane.	2009-04-04 23:26:04
Irreconcilable	Kenneth R. Patton	Hi Ken, You've spoken for millions of poets. How do we tie our minds to offices, duties, obligations, jobs, etc without doing what poets do...wander, reflect and pen? I'm not surprised then that you couldn't help thinking of snow tunnels while packaging a machine. I like 'windows at least' in paranthesis. It informs us early on in the poem that you love nature. Duane.	2009-04-04 23:16:29
Scan	DeniMari Z.	Hi Deni, I appreciate the deep philosophical leanings that have made themselves apparent in all your pieces. There is always interesting food for thought and this is no exception. As a suggestion, I would shorten this and allow the reader to do some of the thinking. I would do away with much of verse 3. Infact, your poem could very well end with verse 2 and thereby pack more power. I also suggest sticking with one image, namely, the flower garden and the ugly ground beneath it. Its a strong image to build on. I therefore also suggest doing away with verse 4. The image of the cracks in the wall and the room above the ugly ground was weaker and not something you should end the poem with. Hope this helps. Duane.	2009-03-29 20:17:13
Horizon	Regis L Chapman	Hi Regis, I like this for the emotional current and rawness that it packs. This could be made into a song and sung...a social commentary put to music. There is much food for thought here. Thank you for the liner notes. Duane.	2009-03-29 20:10:10
Another Spring	Kenneth R. Patton	Hi Kenneth, Good to see another post from you. I'm sure all of us who post would like to have some feedback from you as well...even if it is a line or two. As to the poem, it did leave me wanting more in terms of imagery and unique edge though your celebraion of spring does shine through it. Loong forward to more of your poems. Duane :-)	2009-03-28 01:22:49
Duane's, "Sleep"	James C. Horak	Hi James, I'm at a loss for words. I cant imagine a compliment bigger than this. Thank you once again for the support and encouragement. Duane.	2009-03-23 23:13:51
Mixing Time	James C. Horak	Hi James, 'Mixing Time' is a treat in depth. While the usual vivid and stark imagery is present as in all poems of yours, this makes the reader ponder a little more. I will keep coming back to this as the interpretations of these powerful words linger in my mind. Duane.	2009-03-23 00:22:07
Fields of dreams	Michael Bird	Hi Michael, Your poems are always emotionally charged...you certainly have a strong foundation in terms of keeping your feelings raw and therefore honest and sincere. At one point of time, people could not tell my poems from songs...and its true. While they flowed well and would have sounded good when sung, they somehow lost the steam of a solid compact image filled piece. As you grow poetically, you might want to start trimming your poems, avoid being repetitive and focussing on imagery. I appreciate the emotion of love and admiration in this poem. Duane.	2009-03-22 00:26:43
Spring Spirited	Dellena Rovito	Hi Dellena, A fine welcome to the much awaited 'spring'. My favorite lines - 'Translucent Aloe filled leaves of green Send fluorescent hues bouncing echoes, Around the room, speaking to spirit. It is evident that you rejoice in Nature. Duane.	2009-03-08 21:54:43
What Do They Know	Nancy Ann Hemsworth	Hello Nancy, Good to have you with us this month. This is a sentimental piece about the power of liberation, of overcoming the odds...I'm not sure who it is you speak of but it is clear that this person, once defeated by disease, is ALIVE in the knolwedge of TRUTH and you share this liberation as a partner and support. I can see that this was spontaneous... Duane.	2009-03-08 21:46:28
My Votes for February	James C. Horak	Hi James, Thank you for voting Poverty Woman as # 1 this month. Duane.	2009-03-08 01:16:55
Feb. Vote	Dellena Rovito	Hi Dellena :-) Thank you for considering Sea Weed. It was a fun piece to write and is still in development. For me, Poverty Woman was the stronger of the 3 I submitted in terms of relevance and presentation of thought but I fully respect the fact that we often view pieces as individuals and in terms of what might appeal to us. As long as we rest this opinion on a strong foundation of poetry as an art form, I have no problem with that. Looking forward to more of your work in March and for your feedback on mine. Duane.	2009-03-08 01:14:37
Bugaboo	Dellena Rovito	Hi Dellena, The fear of insects...you add a light touch to it! I enjoyed this piece. My favorite line - "Big bug eyes, huge fangs and horny clawed/ If they grew any larger I'd be mauled Duane.	2009-03-07 21:59:57
Poem Purpose	James C. Horak	Hi James, Beautifuly put...this is a gem. You have crowned the art of poetry writing and everything it seeks to convey. Where have you been? I hope all is well with you. Duane.	2009-02-28 22:40:23
The Balloon	Dellena Rovito	Hi Dellena, This made for an interesting read with some good imagery. I als liked the theme of this piece - an unassuming balloon. While the rhyme scheme was not uniform it did not detract from the flow. I'm not sure if this sort of scheme is one I'm not aware of. Nice piece. Duane.	2009-02-23 23:12:26
Contribution	Thomas H. Smihula	Hi Thomas, A deep philosophical piece. If only more of us refrain from refraining and open ourselves to the mysteries of life and the adventures it holds.... It is great to find a post from you and look forward to increased participation in the months to come. Take care, Duane.	2009-02-22 21:14:03
Says Who?	DeniMari Z.	Hi Deni, You mentioned that this is strictly prose...though a strong poetic sense and feel lifts from it. Good job. Now..to the piece. This is one of the more POWERFUL pieces I have read here recently and by far your BEST in my opinion. Every line is packaged with power and punch and the theme never loses its impact. I'm impressed by this prose oriented piece that has a strong poetic feel to it. GREAT JOB... Nice to see you posting again. Duane.	2009-02-22 02:39:23
Summer evening	Mark Andrew Hislop	Hi Mark, Good to see a post from you after eons. I hope this means that you are going to be around longer and share your talent and offer feedback. It was a thrill to read. 'summer evening'...rich in imagery and strong in construction. Duane.	2009-02-21 21:48:49
Across The Sea	Regis L Chapman	Hi Regis, There is a strong sense of thankfulness, love and satisfaction I sense from this piece which is strong in its ability to emote and express. The final fulfilment of finding all that you dreamed of is a blessing and I'm glad it turned out that way for you. What I felt as I read on, is that as this poem progressed, the power to keep the reader glued might have eroded a tad bit. Hence, I would suggest shortening this piece to pack in more power. The first verse was a lot more powerful with a tendency towards strong imagery - 'salt water of time'.... Avoid 'hand in hand - arm in arm' and reach for a more unique line. Good effort here. Duane.	2009-02-21 21:46:51
Into The Sun	Michael Bird	Hi Michael, I've come to expect a strong display of raw emotion in your poems, which is vital to the art of poetry writing. You have a natural sense of emotion and expressing it - an important friend in your poetic journey. You might want to tone down the jagged structure and tithgten the piece by focussing more on meter, beats, etc. This would help the flow and give your emotion strength. You may also want to say this in fewer verses...the impact will be greater and you will leave some of the feeling and thinking to the reader...sort of self=discovery. Once you sort out meter, you can begin searching for a more unique way in which to convey images. It is great to see you posting more often and I certainly hope you stick around to treat us with the emotional charge of your poems. Duane.	2009-02-19 00:16:56
Meaningful Mush	Kenneth R. Patton	Hi Kenneth, This peice certainly sets the mood for Valentine's day. I appreciate your reflection on this universal feeling we call love...may it tocuh more souls in this world of hate. Duane.	2009-02-15 00:02:46
My Voting Record-January	Dellena Rovito	Hi Dellena, Thank you for thinking so highly of 'standstill minutes'. Take care, Duane.	2009-02-11 00:03:20
My January Vote	James C. Horak	Hi James, Thank you again, for taking the time this past month to comment on and offer valaubale feedback on my submissions. Duane.	2009-02-05 07:29:08
A Perspective	Dellena Rovito	Hi Dellena, I felt the beginning was a lot plainer as it headed to the climax...which had a charge to it that makes it the stronger portion of the poem. Nevertheless, your take on perspectives is very interesting and absorbing. Take care, Duane.	2009-01-29 22:24:34
Sleet and Freezing Rain	Kenneth R. Patton	Hi Kenneth, Short but deep...I get a sense of a couple who are going about their ways..separated by an ice like chill..perhaps over a disagreement or argument..I like the crispness of this moving picture...coats on and out the door in a jiffy !! Duane.	2009-01-29 22:17:54
Midwinter's Dream	Dellena Rovito	Hi Dellena, I liked the message in this narrative piece. I did have some difficulties with flow and language in some areas though - I've tried to bracket them out. The last two verses seem to break away with the structure of the first two verses. Cold it was on that bitters (bitter?) night Winter's onset had long grown old The hoar frosted man stood valiant Meeting existence with all his power His brow line showed (,) deepen(ed) with time White blown hair flew everywhere His stirring eyes ever alert to crisis He roared challenge to the universe The blizzard's fury from arctic blow (blew?) Smothered land with fresh draped snow Nerves steely (,) he addressed conditions Oblivious to danger, holding position People and things, the unknown he knew Through consideration and life's review Vivid in the whiteout, cloak blood let red (cloak blood let red..did not get this) Gold embellished, spread out in the storm Arms extended, his staff beams a circuit, Universe-earth, energy transforms In settings also of ice crusted snow I know, though he resides a distance away I oft hear spirit say, “Embrace honor, And be absolutely fearless, my dear…..”	2009-01-25 23:42:19
From One Time Traveler to Another	James C. Horak	James, A profound piece on time travel - an out of body experience, discovery of the unknown, travelling on thought and nothing more. My kind of experience and your experience as a poet does justice to its expression. Regards, Duane.	2009-01-25 23:30:17
The Tincture	Dellena Rovito	And there can't be anything more important to mankind than.....love Hi Dellena, Wonderfuly flowing piece on the philosophy of love. The piece sings in tribute to this legendary emotion. I liked it. Duane.	2009-01-24 21:45:02
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